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Is it good for children to start using computers from an early age and spend long hours on them? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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In recent times, more and more
children
 are fascinated by the use of
computers
. It is spreading like a wildfire. It is more attractive to
children
 because of online games.
However
, there are both pros and cons. In
this
 essay, I will discuss some reasons why
children
 are spending long hours in front of
computers
 and some challenges to overcome. Let's begin by looking at the advantages of using
computers
. It will help to develop problem-solving skills. What I meant by
this
 is that online games will help to enhance
children
's ability to think about problems which are enhanced while playing and the solutions to solve them.
This
 will help them to solve for society as well as personally in their later life.
Secondly
,
computers
 provide ways to acquire knowledge and help to get knowledge and help to get practical knowledge as well. To emphasize
This
 Let me share an example that I witnessed. My younger brother who is studying 5th grade, by watching youtube tutorials starting Practicing some science experiments from his syllabus.
This
 helped him to get more understanding of concepts. Turning to the other side of the argument, spending long hours in front of
computers
 can lead to some kinds of health issues
such
 as obesity, eye-related diseases, and so on. According to a research survey, ten out of six
children
 are suffering from refractive errors. In a nutshell, I shortly testify that using
computers
 at an early age is a good sign. We need to weigh up the pros of good problem-solving skills and the cons of health-related issues. Personally, I believe that personal growth outweighs any negatives.
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