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Some People Say That The Main Environmental Problem Of Our Time Is The Loss Of Particular Species Of Plants And Animals. Others Say That There Are More Important Environmental Problems. Discuss Both These Views And Give Your Own Opinion?

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In
this
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 day and age, the
environment
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 has been at the forefront of public attention. Some
people
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 think that the loss of various
species
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 of flora and fauna is the main reason for the environmental problems of our time while others claim the opposite. From my point of view, I agree with the idea which is said that there are more important environmental problems.
This
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 essay will highlight both these views and my opinion dramatically. On the one hand, a reason why some
people
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 approve that losing particular
species
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 of
plants
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 as well as
animals
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 is the main issue leading to losing the diversity of ecology and the balance in nature.
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,
people
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 have cut down trees to build their houses.
This
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 action happening a lot make the number of different
species
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 of
plants
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 reduce and
animals
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 do not have a place to live or find food to eat.
As a result
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, a number of flora and fauna stand a risk of extinction
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 as fox or tiger in
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 and a few kinds of woods in
plants
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.
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, a number of citizens believe that there are more important problems of the
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such
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 as global warming or the greenhouse effect. These issues affect human's life badly. To illustrate, there are more than 5 thousand
people
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 who died all around the world due to natural disasters every year and some lands disappear because of erosion or under the water. From my viewpoint, there are numerous harmful effects humans from the
environment
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 while the loss of particular
species
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 of
plants
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 and
animals
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 does not affect
people
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 badly. In conclusion, protecting and reducing the risk of extinction of fauna and flora is a significant matter though we
also
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 find and focus on another problem about the
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which
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that
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 harms our life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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