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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports center now and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The diagrams illustrate the current construction of a university’s
sports
 centre and proposals for its advancement.
Firstly
, the university’s main block is flanked by substantial outdoor courts. There is a 25-metre indoor tank in the main building with a changing room to the west
side
 and a seating area to the east
side
.
Moreover
, the gym’s location is to the rear of the puddle, while the reception is in front of the swimming pond. All the facilities in the main building will not be altered for the plan. The only slight exception is that the gym at the northern end of the building will be extended until eastwards.
Secondly
, the outdoor court on the western
side
 is reconstructed into a big leisure pool. Whereas a play hall will replace the eastern
side
 of the outdoor court,
Next
 to the
sports
 hall. At the same time, two abutting dance studios will be built adjacent to the gym.
Also
, Two additional changing rooms will be constructed on either
side
 of the main building.
This
, the former, is situated in the southwestern corner and a
sports
 shop by the
side
. The latter is located in the southeastern corner with an adjoining cafe. To summarise, it is readily noticeable that the university
sports
 Centre is predicted to expand much more significant, and on either
side
 of outdoor courts of the main block will be converted into several additional facilities including dance studios, a leisure tank, business hall, a business shop, and a cafe.
Besides
, two extra changing rooms will be built in the future.
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