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Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development?

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With these up-to-date technologies, the Internet is becoming developed significantly.
Therefore
, some universities allow
students
 to study online. Personally, I think
this
 trend has both positive and negative.
To begin
 with, it is clearly seen that studying online brings various advantages to both
students
 and schools.
First
 of all, online courses create a good condition for
students
 who live far from
university
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. In fact, geographical conditions are always a barrier that
prevent
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 student
learning
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from learning
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 and widening their knowledge.
Secondly
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Secondly
, related to recent, we are still faced with the Covid-19 pandemic,
thus
, making distance with each other by studying online is the top priority to eliminate the virus effectively.
Moreover
,
this
 development is effective to continue long-term as the pandemic will
last
 for several years.
In addition
, both
students
 and teachers can save a lot of time
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not
prepare
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 for going to school.
On the other hand
, there are still some drawbacks of studying online which are inevitable. As we can see, many people are concerned that studying online does not bring quality as effective as face to face learning.
For example
, some
students
 join
class
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 late or freeze their computers to do other work, or even drop the lesson.
As a result
,
students
 will lose their independence and those accidents may affect their
outcome
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.
Besides
, teachers cannot control all the
students
, which may make them cheat them make
chance
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 for them to cheat. Indeed, some
students
 cheat behind the camera, which is not fair for those who really
those
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really study. To sum up,
although
 studying online has some benefits obviously, there are some drawbacks
of
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this
 trend.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distance learning
  • Flexible schedule
  • Virtual classroom
  • Digital resources
  • E-learning platforms
  • Asynchronous learning
  • Synchronous learning
  • Cost-effective
  • Self-paced study
  • Technical difficulties
  • Blended learning
  • Online modules
  • Remote access
  • Student engagement
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