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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that there are not the only reasons why someone should learn foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 it is said by some that learning a foreign
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 is only useful for travelling or working abroad, others believe that a foreign
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 has much more meaning than that. In my opinion, I agree with the
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 statement since that can create more job opportunities and be constructive in studying. On the one hand, studying a new
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 is only necessary to travel or work for many
people
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 because
people
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 seldom communicate in foreign languages on a daily basis.
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,
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native
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 has been used in most of the business and in the neighbourhoods.
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, improvements of the technologies
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 as translator applications
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another contributing factor that
people
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 does not need to learn
other foreign
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another foreign language
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language
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.
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,
people
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 can use google translate when they need to know the meaning of some words or they can even translate by using voice
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.
On the other hand
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, other
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 think and I agree that there are many reasons to learn a foreign
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. By knowing a
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, there can have more choices in job locally as many global companies
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 been investing in all the countries around the world.
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, Coca Cola is one of the most famous soft drink companies all over the world and they have distributed their branches in many countries globally and they are targeting to hire
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employee who can be able to communicate with than in English rather than local
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 only.
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, learning
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a foreign
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language
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 is
basic
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 need to improve the skills as many books online are written in
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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. As an example, by knowing English the
people
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 who are not studying in
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another medium
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 can develop by self-studying and increase general knowledge. In conclusion, I consider that learning
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language
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 is vital for
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 and learning as it is not the only reason to study for working and travelling abroad.
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  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
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