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How olive oil is manufactured and stored in shops for customers consume

The flow chart illustrates the way in which Olive
Oil
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 is produced. Overall, there are 7 distinct stages in the whole Olive
Oil
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 manufacturing process. Beginning with picking Olives from trees and ending with storage and sale.
To begin
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 with, Olives are picked from trees and
then
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 they are rinsed in the particular machine with cold water. In the
next
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 stage, they are transferred to another device in order to smash. In
this
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 phase, olive is divided into olive pastes and olive stones. The olive stones are discarded. In the subsequent stage, olive pastes are placed in some specific bags which have several holes so as to be put into a pressing machine. Following
this
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, these pressed bags are put into a special machine for separating.
Then
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, olive
oil
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 is removed from the water.
Finally
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, the pure olive
oil
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 is prepared for storing in the shops as well as selling to customers.

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