In different territories, younger students are pursuing part time jobs and it is on debate that may it have a positive and negative influence on students.

In different territories, younger students are pursuing
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time
jobs
and it is on
debate
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the debate
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that may it have a positive and negative influence on students. In our nation
teenagers
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they
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don’t necessarily contribute
in
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part
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part-time
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time
jobs
,
instead
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they continue to study
further
.
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positive points, doing temporary
jobs
can make an individual independent. Like, each student can manage their own wages and can
also
be a
part
of financial support to their family.
Additionally
, participating in irregular
jobs
can
benefits
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a teenager with
work
experience and it may help them with various knowledge about different
work
fields.
For example
, my cousin is pursuing his degree with a job, so it has made him more self-sufficient and is helping his family with monetary support.
On the other hand
, doing half
time
jobs
have a negative effect on the personal life of an individual. As frequent involvement in
part
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time
work
can affect the educational background of a teenager. There are several problems that they may face like
time
management and health issue.
For instance
, if a person is
occupying
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with abundant
of
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work
, related to his education and job
then
he may face
a
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difficulty
to manage
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it which can cause him stress and unhappiness.
Therefore
,
irregular
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task
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can produce a lack of self-
time
which may lead to
a
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pressure
in
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oneself. To conclude, doing
part
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time
job are beneficial in terms of self-independence and awareness, while it
also
has
negative
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a negative
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effect like it can harm
a
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mental health of a person.
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