Many doctors are concerned about the high use of computer games by children and young people . What physical and mental problems arise from excessive use of these games . How could this problems be reduced .
The problem of
computer
games
which
was increasing day by day. It has now become more controversial with many doctors are deeming that Correct pronoun usage
apply
computer
games
occur many problem
among Change to a plural noun
problems
children
and young human
. There are many Fix the agreement mistake
humans
problems
related to the
Correct article usage
apply
computer
games
will
Correct pronoun usage
that will
further
elaborate with possible
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a possible
the possible
message
.
On one hand, there are myriad Fix the agreement mistake
messages
problems
why doctors are concerned about electronic games
but the first
and foremost one is that phiysical
Correct your spelling
physical
activity
are
reducing to Change the verb form
is
play
too Wrong verb form
playing
much
Correct quantifier usage
many
computer
games
. By these children
and young would not want to play outdoor activity
and they prefer to play Fix the agreement mistake
activities
video
games
at a place. As a result
, they become lazy and obesity will be increased due to decrese
outdoor Correct your spelling
decrease
decreased
activity
. For example
, If young age people are playing computer
games
rather than outdoor games
such
as cricket and football, they would invite decease like obesity. Moreover
people who are playing more Add a comma
,Moreover
video
games
then
they
lost a chance to Correct pronoun usage
apply
social
. Replace the word
socialise
This
is because they would spend 8 to 10 hours at a place that is
why they do not met
new people and not try to become Change the verb form
meet
socializ
in their life.
Step deal with Correct your spelling
socialized
socialize
social
problems
are
not complex to neutralise. Change the verb form
is
First
one is that we need some act like under 18 years Correct article usage
The first
children
can not play and make some time limt
on a Correct your spelling
limit
computer
as well as in system
. It would have a chance to reduce not only playing hours but Add an article
the system
also
stop to become
Change the verb form
becoming
Add an article
an addict
addict
Wrong verb form
addicted
for
Change preposition
to
video
games
. A part
from Correct your spelling
Apart
another
Replace the adjective
another possibel measure
other possibel measures
possibel
measures is that parents can encourage for outdoor Correct your spelling
possible
activity
such
as walking, playing games
and other. This
is owing to children
can learn about value
of Add an article
the value
phsiyocal
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physical
activity
.
To conclude, although
the problems
of electronic games
are compler
, the Correct your spelling
complex
solucation
of these is Correct your spelling
solution
solicitation
partical
and Correct your spelling
partial
practical
possibel
Correct your spelling
possible
on
Change preposition
in
real
world. It is helpful for decreasing Add an article
the real
to
hours of playing Change preposition
apply
video
games
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