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It is more important for a building to serve a purpose than to look beautiful. Architects shouldn’t worry about producing building as a work of art. Do you agree or disagree?

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Generally
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 people consider that structures should serve an aim rather than to appear elegant. I completely disagree
this
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 phenomenon. Because buildings directly impact
urban
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the urban
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 skyline and
their
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 appears appeal
people
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 drastically. On the one hand, aesthetic designs dramatically affect the urban skyline that they
represents
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 the evolution of metropolises.
Moreover
, well-designed structures are constructed to introduce vast megacities to other civilizations. Other societies learn enormous metropolitans or cultural towns due to iconic designs and masterpieces.
Furthermore
, much more styles and revolutions elaborate the importance of aesthetics in the field of architecture
such
 as Baroque, Futurism, Brutalism, Bauhaus, Rococo style.An example is the Heydar Aliyev Cultural Center, an iconic
design
 that has increased the fame of the Republic of Azerbaijan around the world.
Therefore
, an architect should think of a function as well as a concept when beginning to plan a new project.
On the other hand
, a building which facade or skin were designed magnificently attract client minds properly. People who want to buy a dwelling place examine the facade of the settlement
firstly
. They explore the interior
design
 or functions of flats or houses
secondly
.
Thus
,
this
 situation shows that the importance of residents which facades were built carefully.
For instance
, Antonio Gaudi who is an architect of Sagrada Familia mentions in his popular novel called Duets that context, concept and functionality should co-exist in
design
. For
this
 reason, manufacturers should take care of the facade
design
 of structures in order for a remarkable
design
 to appear. As a consequence, architects should pay attention to the aesthetic beauty as well as the functionality of the
design
 due to the impact of buildings on the indigenous population and other societies.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • functionality
  • prioritize
  • building design
  • meet the needs
  • occupants
  • aesthetically pleasing
  • landmarks
  • symbolize
  • balance
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