In many countries, as people are earning more these days they are also spending money in buying more and more items. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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it has not only positive development but
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of direction. On the one
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there are many merits of the Earth is said but the
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reason why
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would earn while salary a do not spend
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buying things that for that
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circulate in
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economic growth would be stopped for countries. Apart from it is another positive is that a government can earn some text from that trend. It is going to government apply some tax on buying so why
people
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, there are some negative of that trend. The
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plan financial planning.By
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people
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not enough funds for saving.
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retire fund as well as mankind have not enough
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there
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some
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faced by
people
who spend the all
money
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buying
items
. we cannot ignore
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negative point.
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