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In many countries, as people are earning more these days they are also spending money in buying more and more items. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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The importance of spending
money
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 on
items
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. Which was always debatable has now become more controversial with many
people
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 are earning more salary as well as they spend funds in buying more and more things
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 it has not only positive development but
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 a few demerits of
these trend
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this trend
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. That essay will
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viewpoint
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view point
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 of direction. On the one
hand
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 there are many merits of the Earth is said but the
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 and foremost one is that economic growth of nations. It is
main
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 reason why
money
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spent
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is spent
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 on an item by
human
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humans
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,
economic
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 cycle will run from it.
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, if
person
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a person
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 would earn while salary a do not spend
money
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a
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buying things that for that
money
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 and
not
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does not
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 circulate in
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the economy
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economy
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 cycle
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 economic growth would be stopped for countries. Apart from it is another positive is that a government can earn some text from that trend. It is going to government apply some tax on buying so why
people
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 bought these
items
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 and human are paying tax.
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, there are some negative of that trend. The
first
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 one is that
people
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 can or
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a
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plan financial planning.By
this
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, they earn
money
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, as well as
people
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,
people
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 spend that all
money
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 on
items
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 what they want so they
have
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do have
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 not enough funds for saving.
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,
people
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 total spend all salary on
items
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 so they are they
they
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have
not
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 retire fund as well as mankind have not enough
money
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 for some medical emergency. To conclude
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 there are many reasons why spending
money
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 because it is a vital part of
economy
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the economy
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 there
are
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 some
problem
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problems
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 faced by
people
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 who spend the all
money
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in
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a
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buying
items
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. we cannot ignore
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a
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negative point.

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