Some people believe that educational qualifications will always bring success in life. Other people say that educational qualifications do not necessarily bring success. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In
this
contemporary world, it is argued that higher
education
is vital and brings success in life,
while
others confirm that it is not essential for achieving success. In
this
essay, I will discuss both these views and try to draw some conclusions. On the one hand, it is believed that higher
education
is important and thanks to it people can become successful. When people study at university, they receive the necessary information, skills and communication environment. They
also
gain practice and experience.
That is
, all conditions are created at university so that students are immersed in
this
environment and understand whether
this
is their life's work. Specifically, to become a doctor a person needs a higher
education
, as thanks to it he fully masters his profession and becomes successful.
On the other hand
, some say that educational qualification is not
neseccary
Correct your spelling
necessary
. In my opinion, if a person even has a higher
education
, it does not mean that he or she become successful, it depends on a huge amount of factors. There are many professions in which higher
education
is not important, but personal qualities are vital: patience, dedication, leadership and ambition. Take an artist as an example. Most artists do not have higher
education
,but they have inner talent and the necessary qualities, and,
hence
, they achieve success.
In other words
, in order to become a successful person higher
education
is not vital. In conclusion,
while
I believe that qualification is vital, I would
also
argue that other factors
such
as inner talent and personal qualities are
also
important.
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grammatical
Avoid minor grammatical mistakes (e.g., 'necessary' instead of 'neseccary').
support exemplification
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task response
Expand on the discussion of factors besides education that contribute to success for a more balanced argument.
structure
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion.
task response
Both sides of the argument are adequately addressed.
coherence cohesion
The main ideas are logically structured and flow well.

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