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Some people believe that educational qualifications will always bring success in life. Other people say that educational qualifications do not necessarily bring success. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In
this
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 contemporary world, it is argued that higher
education
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 is vital and brings success in life,
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 others confirm that it is not essential for achieving success. In
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 essay, I will discuss both these views and try to draw some conclusions. On the one hand, it is believed that higher
education
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 is important and thanks to it people can become successful. When people study at university, they receive the necessary information, skills and communication environment. They
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 gain practice and experience.
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, all conditions are created at university so that students are immersed in
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 environment and understand whether
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 is their life's work. Specifically, to become a doctor a person needs a higher
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, as thanks to it he fully masters his profession and becomes successful.
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, some say that educational qualification is not
neseccary
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necessary
. In my opinion, if a person even has a higher
education
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, it does not mean that he or she become successful, it depends on a huge amount of factors. There are many professions in which higher
education
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 is not important, but personal qualities are vital: patience, dedication, leadership and ambition. Take an artist as an example. Most artists do not have higher
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,but they have inner talent and the necessary qualities, and,
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, they achieve success.
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, in order to become a successful person higher
education
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 is not vital. In conclusion,
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 I believe that qualification is vital, I would
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 argue that other factors
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 as inner talent and personal qualities are
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 important.
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grammatical
Avoid minor grammatical mistakes (e.g., 'necessary' instead of 'neseccary').
support exemplification
Try to include more specific examples to support your main points.
task response
Expand on the discussion of factors besides education that contribute to success for a more balanced argument.
structure
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion.
task response
Both sides of the argument are adequately addressed.
coherence cohesion
The main ideas are logically structured and flow well.
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