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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Several problems,
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 as social and practical problems, can appear when living in a foreign country and needing to speak their
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. In
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 context, I agree with that statement. But
on the other hand
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, there will always be some ways to adapt. Communicating in a foreign
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 will make an uncomfortable feeling to some
people
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. Because that condition can make it difficult to interact in social life.
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, they have to learn a new
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.
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, Indonesian
people
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 have a problem communicating with foreigners when they live abroad.
This
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 problem can be caused by the need to adapt to different languages. The impact is, that there will be miscommunication. Not only in daily life
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 but
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 in their job and network. As they socialize, it will be easier to adapt and speak a foreign
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.
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, speaking another
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 can be easier if
people
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 learn and practice the
language
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 well.
People
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 can learn from listening to other
people
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’s interactions, like conversations at work or when shopping in the supermarket.
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, they can
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 practice by joining the conversation.
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, when living abroad,
people
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 can listen when buying daily needs in the market and try to speak to the cashier in their
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. In summary, problems that may appear when
people
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 need to speak in a foreign
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,
such
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 as uncomfortable feelings and difficulties in interaction, can be prevented. Learning and
practicing
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 more are the best ways to make them enjoy the conversation.
This
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 method will make
people
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 convenient when meeting with foreign
people
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.

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Expand your introduction to provide a clearer background on the topic. Clearly state your position and outline your main points.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words and phrases to enhance the flow of your ideas and improve coherence. Consider making the connection between points clearer.
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Provide more specific examples to support your claims. The examples given are somewhat general and could be more detailed.
task achievement
Your essay presents a balanced view by acknowledging both problems and solutions related to speaking a foreign language.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and reinforces your overall argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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