Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

Are advertisements effective in our life to rely on them? Marketing is a business that aims to attract
people
and make money. So, if we know the goal behind
this
business, we can comprehend the point that
marketers
don’t pay much attention to
offer
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us important
products
in our life. I believe that
marketers
are deceiving
people
by
fake
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flawless
image
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and useless
products
, but we can avoid that by searching and buying our
products
by ourselves.
Firstly
, advertisers always tend to make
perfect
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picture
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pictures
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of their
products
in order to attract
people
’s attention.
For instance
, KFC announced an attractive offer
last
month and it seemed irrevocable for
people
who saw it.
Although
the price was competitive for a natural fresh chicken dish, the real plate was different from the offer seen in the advertisement.
This
shows a small sample that
marketers
only care about money with their offers.
Secondly
,
marketers
didn’t care about how useful will the product be for
people
. In fact, they are aware of how they will make a huge amount of money regardless
the
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importance of
products
in
people
’s life. In TV channels,
for example
,
people
can notice the number of useless
products
showed
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in advertisements
such
as massage tools and hair improvement
products
and many more. To prevent these lies from advertisers,
people
can go to any place and buy their needed
products
by themselves without looking at any advertisement.
Moreover
, they can enjoy shopping and comparing different types of
products
shown in shops. On balance,
marketers
will always try to let their
products
attractive and attainable to as
much
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people
.
Thus
, the only way we can protect ourselves is to not put an eye on their lies and try to do the job of purchasing
product
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by ourselves.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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