It is generally acknowledged that families are not so close as they used to be. Give some reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought closer together. Include any relevant examples from your experience.

Over the
last
two or three decades, the families bonding have been decreasing an enormously and they do not like to
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very close due to many
reasons
such
as technology and migration. There are some possible solutions to solve
this
issue.
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the following
reasons
. There are two main
reasons
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the families cannot
too
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close
in
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nowadays. One of the main
reasons
is that
thechnology
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technology
,
this
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can reduce the bonding of
relationship
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relationships
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between families because people would like to contact
with
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social
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medias
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like Whatsapp and Facebook rather than maintaining
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relationship
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.
For example
, today folks do not talk to their's parents and they do not spend
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more time with their parents due to they always
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social
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medias
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. Another reason is that any family
members
move to other parts of the area from their's home town while the family bonding must be reduced.
Although
, there are some possible suggestions to solve
this
issue. One of the major solutions is that the young population should be spent
a
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quality time with their's family even they might be gone
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any family vacation,
thus
, bonding might be closed.
For instance
, Indian family
members
always go
to
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family
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holiday
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with
whole
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family
when
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summer season,
as a result
, still now Indians are maintaining a good relationship rather than any other
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. To conclude, family
connecting
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is the utmost importance of every country but today generation population cannot close with
thier's
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their
family
members
due to technology and migration. Going family
trip
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is a possible remedy for reducing
this
trouble. I believe that
this
remedy could be helped to become close
the
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family
members
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • family interactions
  • technological advancements
  • virtual interactions
  • dual-income households
  • urbanization
  • migration
  • social structures
  • individualism
  • family cohesiveness
  • belonging
  • open communication
  • emotional support
  • shared activities
  • family dynamics
  • work-life balance
  • family traditions
  • regular gatherings
  • counseling
  • family therapy
  • prioritizing family time
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