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Nowadays many people smoke more cigarette do you agree or dis agree

#people #smoke #cigarette #dis
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 of commodities in 4 different types of transmission in the UK from 1974 to 2002 It is noticeable that the type of transmission by road kept its domination over
20-year
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 British people tended to use pipeline transportation by far the least for transmitting their goods In 1974, 70
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tonnes
commodities
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transported
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 on the roads by trucks and cars. To compare, the
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 of products transmitted by pipeline was twelvefold less in that year. Until 2002, both figures saw a gradual increase in their quantities and were 98
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 of goods transported by railway and ships registered nearly the same rate in 1974, at 40
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. By 2002, the figure for railway transmission of commodities fluctuated and remained a slight increase at final, while the rate of goods transported by ships rose to 67
million
tonnes
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