Children are facing more problem nowadays from academy, social and commercial perspective. What are the causes of these pressures and what am I should be taken to reduce this pressure?

In
this
modern era, people and their needs are mercurial. Especially in the case of an heir, the three important needs are education, social and commercialistic things. By these changes, several effects are seen. Teenagers' society includes competition, jealousy, stress and habit of comparison too. From an academic perspective, by the advancement and improvement in education quality now have access even many scions with low cost.
However
,
this
certainly increases the competition and mental pressure on the heir to succeed in a specific examination or to remain at rank 1 in the classroom. Teenagers usually learn experiences, ethics and moral values by being social in their society. Contrary,
this
seems to change as adolescents feel insecure about meeting other people. It now becomes common when a child is introduced by his parent to an adolescent of his age group, he starts comparing himself to them
moreover
,
this
leads to hypertension in a child at an early age. Society has improved a lot as commercialisation happened, which exponentially increase access of a person to more alternatives.
That is
one of the reasons why generation z kids demand more things related to technology to seem superior in their friend circle. The thing which is ignored by a kid is the financial conditions of his parents which makes the tension between offspring and parents.
This
gap is enlarged by the digital divide between them.
This
increasing pressure among offspring can be reduced by schools by introducing counselling sessions for them, where kids can discuss their problems with their teachers whereas parents spend more time with their scion in order to decrease stress in their minds.
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