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Some people think city planners should create more green spaces and plant trees. Others believe that they should focus on building new homes. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The epoch we are currently living in is marked by the emergence of a new debate about
cities
 and how they are designed. Some people assume that towns suffer from a lack of green,
therefore
, urban places should provide more ecological spaces and trees, whilst others assert that it would be more pertinent to focus on building new residential neighbourhoods.
This
 essay will discuss both views and will
also
 express the author’s opinion. On the one hand, many people complain about the scare of green spaces in their urban jungles, as they have already risen up their voices to express their vows for more trees on metropoles. It is crystal clear that parks play a key role in the viability of
cities
, in the regulation of air quality, absorbing carbon monoxide produced by cars, and releasing oxygen which is essential for humans.
Moreover
, it is said that eco-friendly
cities
 are able to maintain freshness in the summer. The study of a Moroccan eminent scientist proved that citizens who live
next
 to parks and forests are more unlikely to develop pulmonary diseases.
On the other hand
, many people espouse the idea that metropole developers and designers should be more focused on creating new homes and residential districts. It is undoubted that the world is facing a huge baby boom, the consequence of
this
 great upheaval is the explosion of the demand for new apartments and houses. Thereby, city planners are enforced to develop additional houses to host new families to avoid a lodging crisis.
Last
 but not least, societal debates can lead to tremendous improvements in our quality of living, if only we citizens, take the path of a more ecological way of life. I strongly agree with the idea that
cities
 got to be endowed with more natural spaces
such
 as public gardens.
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