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Some people think it's better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it's good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #friends
While making
friends
, there can be two approaches : to associate with
like minded
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 thought process
people
 or to be with
people
 who have opposing ways of thinking in any discourse. I completely agree when
people
 with different schools of thoughts c collaborate it is preferable .
Firstly
, friendship is a relationship which
one
 creates as per their choice.
However
, when the interest, liking and
the
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outlook towards anything or anyone
is
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 similar it becomes smooth to interact openly and discuss freely.
Additionally
,
the
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decision making becomes easier.
For example
 ,
one
 of my
friends
 and I perceive most of the day to day scenarios in a similar way, our ways to execute
also
 synchronize. As a matter of
fact
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 we can make decisions on each other's behalf. But,
this
 process thwarts the vision and limits our thought process.
Secondly
, our association with
friends
 plays a vital role in
one
's personality development, character and growth. When there are different ideas and thoughts, it fosters thinking vividly and broadly.
Furthermore
, it cultivates an acceptance to respect contrasting opinions.
For example
, when two
friends
 debate on a topic, the conclusion is enriching as both the parties have gained some insights and expanded in terms of knowledge. Agglomerating the aforementioned points, a true friend is
one
 who guides in a correct way and protects from downfall. A healthy discussion is
one
which
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 allows
people
 to present their likes and dislikes openly. As a matter of
fact
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 it is an exercise to be habitualized in respecting others views.
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  • bond
  • support
  • unconditional love
  • shared values
  • mutual understanding
  • trust
  • emotional well-being
  • interdependence
  • societal norms
  • companionship
  • loyalty
  • advice
  • experiences
  • mentorship
  • trustworthy
  • reliable
  • reliable
  • cherish
  • strengthen
  • deepen
  • attach importance to
  • prioritize
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