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In the future, more people will choose to go on holidays in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

#future #people #holidays #country #travel #holiday
Travelling has become a favourite hobby, everyone looks forward to
go
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 on
holidays
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holiday
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 during their
next
 vacation. People will prefer to travel within the
country
 rather than flying abroad. In
this
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 I will discuss why I disagree with the above statement, on why travellers will enjoy going to a different destination. Nowadays flying to another
country
 has become common because it is quite cheap
comparing
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 to the olden times.
For example
, there are so many travel agents who offer fully packaged plans including
visa
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, flight tickets, airport transfers,
accomodation
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accommodation
 and tickets to
places
 of interest too.
Which
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 makes the whole process easier for the traveller; in the
meantime
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 cheaper
aswell
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as well
 as everything can be done under
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one roof
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one-roof
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. While holidaying in our own
country
 can show us only the
places
, going abroad will give us an opportunity to experience
new
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 culture, meet new people and
also
 a better chance to learn about the particular
country
 itself. Going out of the
country
also
 gives the traveller the
opportunit
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opportunity
 to visit
places
 that which they might only have seen on TV or in movies.
As
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a
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conclusion, I believe holidays are better enjoyed when we see or experience something entirely new rather than, visiting the same
places
 which we have already visited or seen in our motherland.
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