Q. Some people say that individuals who make a lot of money are the most successful. Others think that those who contribute to society like scientists and teachers are more successful. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

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Some believe the symbol of
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is personal wealth and richness, while in other opinions,
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making a
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develop
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as inventors and scholars win more
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. Even though
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can bring about individual pleasure and comfort, I believe it is more successful that achievement for the
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makes the result of historical development and the prosperity of countries. There is no answer to
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successful in
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life. Every person has
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each standard of
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, which they achieving individual happiness can have successful
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or they should go on to greater accomplishments for their
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. Admittedly,
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must be the essential condition to gain daily happiness as there are many
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to suffer from
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poverty in the world, and it can
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the root of
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.
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, if
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win a large amount of wealth, they can have more stable and enjoyable
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to spend
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on even
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with others as well as all they want. Many others would like to seek their wealthy
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.
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, it can be said
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is
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enough successful factor to afford those
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.
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,
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working for their
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can be more successful since it is worth achieving their goals and
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. It is more difficult to get over a great achievement than simply
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money
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.
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, if one’s research or contribution is effective to
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,
money
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would automatically follow them as
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success
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makes the
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develop and prosper more. Unfortunately, many rich
people
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have the lack of achieving through effort, attaining all they want easily by
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, while
people
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succeeding by their passion cannot only get their wealth and
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, they
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can feel a
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sense of accomplishment. Their
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would
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history due to their successful result of
contribution
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. For these reasons,
people
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contributing to
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would be more successful for both their countries and themselves. In conclusion,
individual
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richness can lead to successful
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,
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in which
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the wealthy can receive all of personal entertainment.
On the other hand
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, in my opinion, it is the authentic
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to win
people
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’ achievement by their effort, contributing to
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.
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