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Establishing good relationship in the workplace is not important, as the primary goal of person is to focus on work. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#relationship #workplace #person #focus #work
For many,
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primary point of interest. I partially disagree
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 and keep myself in the intermediate position since,for me,
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 among
work
 colleague is equally important just as the quality of the
work
 produced.
This
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work
 and healthy friendship
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 critically significant in any employment.
First
 of all, our main target should be on the job in any industrial sector. Agreeably, the employees are expected to complete the assigned tasks in the given amount of time.
This
 can be achieved by spending full attention on the set target.
For example
, teaching instruction should be differentiated to cater
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 learning needs. For that, the classroom teacher should come up with possible ways,
otherwise
, the learning objective would not be achieved.
This
 can adversely affect the career growth of anyone in the teaching position as the performance review demands the strategies implemented for differentiated learning.So, it is highly impossible to achieve outcomes by simply not focusing on
work
.
On the other hand
, most job sectors demand
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team
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work
. Team effort can achieve success only when there is vast cooperation among like-minded individuals.
This
 obviously demands
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 environment among working partners.
For instance
, the developed behaviour management plan should be shared with different subject teachers who walks into the classroom to achieve the overall target,else the planned strategies would not be effective.
Thus
, any successful
work
, demands crucially significant group
work
. In conclusion, while
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 the same time
work
 should be the main concern for the employee, it is equally important to develop
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 friendship for productive
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work
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 is the demanding skill of most workplace.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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