Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals

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Some people argue that
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are harmful and should no longer exist while others say that
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are safe places for wild lives.
Animals
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might be treated badly, surrounded with awful environments, and even worse there might be animal
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at the
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, while in some cases
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are safe places for many species because
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can protect them from any dangers, safe from extinction, and
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close to vet. I believe that the problem of poor environment and animal
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in
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should be solved to give
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a better life.
Animals
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might be treated badly, surrounded
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awful environments, and even worse there might be animal
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at the zoo,
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of all, many wild lives at
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are not being treated well, and some of them are forced to live in limited space.
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, some of them may look underweight because they are not well fed as well as they should.
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, some
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did not feed for a week which made them sick and hungry from not having anything in their stomach.
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, the
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provide small areas for wild lives, which could lead to many mental and physical health problems
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as depression and being inactive.
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, some advantages for
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that live in the wildlife park are safety and lowering extinction rates. Since the zoo is a public place, any situation that would be dangerous for them will have a low opportunity to happen.
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, many zookeepers and staff watch over when
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feel sick. They will get treated by the vet on time.
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, since
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often separate species and do not have many of them in one area,
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helps them to be safe from extinction that might have accidentally happened. In conclusion, there are more disadvantages than advantages for
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that live most of their life in
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because of the tiny space
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provided, some places might take care of them badly, and animal
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often happens.
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  • conservation
  • captive breeding
  • habitat
  • ethical issues
  • zoochosis
  • endangered species
  • genetic diversity
  • reintroduction programs
  • wildlife education
  • sanctuary
  • natural living conditions
  • artificial environments
  • behavioral enrichment
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