Nowadays, celebrities earn more money than the politicians do. What are the reasons for this? Is it a negative or a positive development?

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argued that famous
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pay more for their
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as compared to
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politicians
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. The main
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behind that celebs have so many opportunities like to
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in movies,
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and advertisements but, lawmakers get only
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salary which is given by the government.
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trend because
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job is very different because
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the nation is not
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easy task. Let's discuss its causes and impacts in brief.
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is celebrities
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in
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industry, they don't have any
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salary their income depends upon their performance.
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is
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famous actor in Hollywood, he does action film if his film
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100 million on a screen
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definitely he achieves
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for his movie. So that, people love him,
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, he makes new contacts in
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and
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more money.
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, in
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field,
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totally different,
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also
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work
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hard for their nation and always make new plans which are important for
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as well as implement them.
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, they earn
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amount for their
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but,
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keep that thing in mind they
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get many facilities like government house, car and security.
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,
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are real heroes because they do lots of
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for the well fair of society so, they deserve more money which they are taken already,
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trend may help to indulge the young people in politics so, they can choose it as a profession. In conclusion,
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earning is not matter in all jobs, if it will be fair in all professions people can choose their professions wisely.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endorsements
  • revenue streams
  • global presence
  • diversified branding
  • income sources
  • free-market principles
  • market value
  • government budgets
  • public funds
  • public perception
  • value generation
  • bureaucratic
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
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