In many parts of the world there is continuous coverage of sports on television. Some people believe this discourages the young from taking part in any sports themselves. Discuss the view and give your opinion.

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Nowadays in these modern ,worlds most of the fields are covered up on
television
which is related to
sports
or else fashion etc. Some people believed that the continuous seeing by some
children
disheartened them to take participate in any
sports
events. In my opinion, it is not discouraging them. My points can be seen in
further
paragraphs. In today's ,world almost every people and
children
also
use the
tv
as a source of entertainment purpose.
However
, some of them look as for gaining knowledge. Some people suggest that most of the
sports
events are covered up on
television
as a result
of that ,
children
do not take participate in
sports
activities. There are several reasons behind that. The
first
and foremost one is that ,as by seeing most of the well-known sportsman on
tv
children
might think that it needs so much of hard
work
to reach their level.
Furthermore
, only because of the hard
work
they do not take part in any
sports
.
As a result
, they only show broadcasting on
tv
and they can not come out of their comfort zone and use the
tv
for entertainment only.
However
, some of the
children
use
television
for their knowledge related to
sports
. They show
television
in a different manner. If they have an interest in any sport
then
they cannot afraid to do hard
work
as they show their ideal on
tv
on daily basis.
Furthermore
, they see in a positive way.
In addition
to that, they think that if they do hard
work
they definitely going to reach a top-level
sportsman like
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sportsmanlike
show examples
their ideal. They think like that one day they
also
earn name and fame by doing hard
work
. In conclusion, I strongly agree with the latter part that if
children
have thought in their mind that they take participate in
sports
events
then
they cannot be disheartened by seeing on
tv
that it needs much hard
work
they only think in a positive way.
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