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The manufacturing and use of cars damages the environment but their popularity is increasing. Why is this happening? How could this be controlled?

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In today's world, we are standing in front of an enormous environmental crisis. If we want our planet to exist in the nearest future, we need to implement various improvements and change our attitude. But even though we are conscious of the information the newest research has shown that there is an increase in the usage of cars. Autos play a significant role when it comes to statistics about what causes pollution. There are many reasons why
people
 still decide to use vehicles to move around, but we can decrease the range of
this
 issue by establishing new approaches and making changes. As we all know,
people
 tend to pick the things which are the most comfortable for them.
For example
, a human who was making a decision whether he or she would take a bus or drive by car would pick the
second
 option.
Furthermore
, nowadays,
people
 decide to move out outside of the big cities, in order to have a peaceful life in rural areas.
However
, they still work in the cooperations in the city centre where they need to get every morning. In order to be there and spare as much time as they can, they chose vehicles. As a great example of
this
 kind of inhabitants
are
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 parents who need to bring their children to and from school before and after work. Whereas, these problems can be easily resolved by enhancing public transportation.
Such
 as long and short distance trains, buses and underground.
For example
, special buses can drive around the children's houses, in order to pick them up before and bring them back after lessons.
In addition
, the government should encourage
people
 to use more sustainable solutions,
such
 as cycling, by developing new roads dedicated for them.
Lastly
, humans in charge can consider increasing the cost of fuel, so the citizens would not afford it anymore. To sum up, all of the troubles caused by the overuse of autos can be fixed by the Nations that should focus on evolving public transportation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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