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Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Improving public
health
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 has been a major concern lately. Many
people
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 believe that providing good
sports
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facilities
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 is the best solution, whereas another group argues it will contribute only in a small part and requires metrics to measure performance.
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 creating good
sports
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facilities
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 might be a factor to make good public
health
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, increasing the number of
sports
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facilities
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 will be the only answer.
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 with, building good
sports
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facilities
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 will make
people
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 stay healthy and prevent themselves from sickness. The
facilities
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 will encourage
people
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 to
exercise
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 which is the main key to making
people
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 in society healthy.
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, keeping good
health
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 is not only a factor to make good public
health
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. There are many other
factors
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 that should be considered to improve public
health
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.
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, Bangkok has many good parks for runners. Runners tend to have better
health
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 than
people
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 who don't
exercise
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 but many runners barely approach fundamental
health
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 care
such
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 as sufficient nutrition or yearly
health
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 checkup.
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, preventing sickness has many dimensions
besides
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exercise
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. The fundamental living
factors
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 need to be considered to provide good public
health
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such
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 as providing healthy food, making clean sanitation, vaccination, and etc. Without these
factors
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,
sports
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 can't keep someone life.
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,
exercise
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people
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 rarely get sick from disease because their behaviour (
exercise
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 every day) brust their immunity system to active and strong.
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, many of them don't have good
health
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poor sanitation systems make them drink dirty water. In conclusion, an increasing number of
sports
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facilities
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 might make better public
health
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 but it is not the best way to improve. There are many other fundamental
factors
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 that need to be considered and improved in order to make the best solution.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • sports facilities
  • physical activity
  • exercise
  • chronic diseases
  • heart disease
  • obesity
  • inclusivity
  • participation
  • safe environment
  • social interaction
  • community engagement
  • comprehensive approach
  • health education programs
  • environmental factors
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • quality healthcare services
  • public health initiatives
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