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You recently went to a concert and thought one of te singers was very good. You want to tell him hoe you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter - say how you feel about his performance -give details of your musical activities -explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

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Dear Andy, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am writing
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 letter to you to express my opinion of your musical
night
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. My name is June, I have been attended
to
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your even
on
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last
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saturday
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night
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, the
song
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 you sang was
amzing
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amazing
. I have never seen
a
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artisc
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artist
artists
artistic
 like you,
which
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 you can
sang
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sing
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 a lot of different
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song
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 with a
becautiful
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beautiful
 tone.
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, you can
danced
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 very well too. I
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really
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relly
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really
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 enjoy that every
song
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 you have
sang
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in
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that
night
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 and, it
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is
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it
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 took me to the moon.
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, I would like to
invovel
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involve
 you to join my
valunteen
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volunteer
 Christmas even for the elderly people. The Christmas party is on the 20th Dec 2021, only for a
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, is it located in the City hall
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 6pm to 11pm. I have been decided to play some soft music, some of your we will be singing some Chrismas
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song
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 and your famous
song
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.
Althought
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, I know you are a busy man, but I would love you can bring some joy
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 the old people. If you could sing some
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favour
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song
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 that will be very sensational. I hope you can come for that
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, even just for an hour that will be very helpful, as you are the best singer in our country. Please let me know what you think. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Thank you. Yours sincerely June

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