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Some people like to try new things for example places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion

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There are people who enjoy experiencing new
things
 like visiting places and trying out different cuisines while others prefer doing
things
 which they are comfortable with. I will discuss both
the
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point of view over
this
 essay with an example to make it understandable. To start with, every human in
this
 world have developed their own perspective towards life which mainly depends upon the experiences they encounter. A person who likes to try new
things
 usually
have
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 a positive approach
towards
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 life.
For example
, an individual who takes occasional holidays at different sites can decompress himself from the everyday stress they encounter.
On the other hand
,
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a Person
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Person
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People
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 with
attitude
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 to experience various opportunities
lack
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 stability. People
who
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are afraid to take
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a risk
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risk
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 and
worried
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 about the potential disappointment
they
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 may occur if they try new
things
. To illustrate, if a person enjoyed his meals at a particular restaurant, they would tend to continue to visit the same food joint because of the past experience. To conclude, some people keep doing the same old
things
 to avoid disappointment.
However
, I like those who have an interest in trying new
Things
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 because they are more positive about life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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