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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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With the progress of social media these days,
people
 are able to get access to a vast amount of information including
books
 and articles online. It is argued by some
people
 that
this
 trend will deter
readers
 from purchasing printed materials because
the
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online sources of information are free of charge.
This
 is totally a possible trend in the future and
this
 essay will clarify some of the main reasons for
this
 inclination of
readers
 and try to draw some conclusions. The booming of
books
 and news websites available on the internet gives
people
 infinite access to them at no cost or with a small amount of money. That means the online reading model may be extremely cost-saving in comparison to reading with real
books
 on
hands
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. Some types of
books
 are possibly too costly for many
people
 and
this
 may lead to an increasing switch to online reading. To illustrate, a person may spend an average of 20
dollar
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 to purchase a self-help book whereas there
are
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 an assortment of
this
 kind of
books
 online with extremely modest fees.
As a result
, it is indisputable that there is an inclination of book lovers towards online reading.
Besides
, nearly every single person owns a smartphone that allows them to read everywhere and at any time they want with simply a click.
Furthermore
, an enormous amount of
books
 can probably
downloaded
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 and stored
in
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 a cellphone and be carried anywhere whereas the traditional methods of storing printed
books
 did not allow
readers
 to enjoy
such
 convenience.
Hence
, it would be totally predictable that the consumption of materials
which
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 are printed will possibly not be of any prevalence towards most of the
readers
 in the future. To cite an example, an investigation into
reading
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habit
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 of Japanese bookworms in 2019 showed that almost 80 per cent of them flicked through a book on their cell phones while they were on a metro or a train home. All in all, due to the
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 advantage and portability of non-printed
books
 and newspapers that are more and more accessible on the internet, the prospects of printed
books
 may not seem so optimistic.
However
, there will probably be a minority of
people
 who still adore and embrace the values of printed
books
 despite the evolution of new types of reading.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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