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With a growing world population one of the most pressing issues is that of feeding such a large number of people. Some people think that GM foods offer a viable solution to this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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One of the most significant issues nowadays is world hunger. Because of the growth
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, there are more and more
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 who cannot be provided with
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. To solve
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 problem
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 have started to modify
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 to make it more nutritious and rich in supplements.
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, some persons are still wary of consuming
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 on a regular basis. I strongly believe that
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 is an effective way to feed humanity.
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, the nutritional value of
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 can be increased by using
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 methods. It allows
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 to be fed with less amount of
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 and reduce the level of consumption of the limited resources.
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, crops can be made resistant to harmful insects and fungi that help farmers to get better yield and,
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, we will have more
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 to eat.
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,
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 foods can have a longer shelf life and can be edible for the longer term. To sum up, using
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 is a really powerful method to overcome
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 a problem as world hunger. If scientists provide
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 with more information about
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 safety and the pros of using scientific methods to improve what we eat, there will be much less criticism of GMOs.
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