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Some experts suggested that cyclists should have to pass a exam before riding on cycle for road safety. To what extended do you agree or disagree?

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A certain number of professionals recommended that
cyclist
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cyclists
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 should attend a test before
cycle
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the cycle
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 rally for a safe journey. I strongly agree with
this
 topic and will discuss it as detailed in the following paragraphs.
First
 and foremost, nowadays, many people are aware of their health and they have been choosing cycling as the prompt exercise in daily life
therefore
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,they keep the workout on cycles at evening or in the morning.Even though some of them are do cycling without
have
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 prior experience which may cause to face accidents and
this
 incident will lead
negative
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 impact on society.
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,one of my friends, who has tried to reduce fat through
the
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apply
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cycling methods and began to run on it but met an accident
because
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 lack of experiments.
Secondly
,several companies are introduced to modern technology systems in the market since a proper education is a must to all for how it functions while riding. Current days, students and adults are
also
 well interested to attend a cycling competition since they get inspired by the tv shows
which
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related to the mud race and adventurous
trip
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trips
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 by cycle while, they don't have enough practice. Many professionals have been coming forward to teach about the risk of
this
 game to attend without a relevant test.
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,in Russia,many public is riding safely after the government appointed a team to give practise before riding a cycle even after reported many accidents.Another part is several groups
says
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 that health is more important than anything,so the adventurers must attend a class regarding the safe traffic and
thus
 will make to handle a situation if need to face. I really stick
on with
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this
 topic because of the points mentioned in the above paragraphs and I suggest that the concerned authorities or program conductors must give valuable training to the contestant.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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