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Nowadays,many people choose to be self-employed, than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self employed?

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These days,everything has changed
such
 as the approach of life and
work
.A majority of
people
 tend to
work
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 their own
instead
 of
work
 for someone or
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 official.In
this
 essay,
i
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 will explore some substantial reasons and find out some pros and cons. In my opinion,the significant and main factor is freedom.The vast majority of
people
 like to be free in the workplace.Some organizations have many strict regulations so employees prefer to be self-employed because they can have their own rules.
For instance
,you consider that you can go to
work
 whenever you want ,like in the early morning, in the afternoon and etc ,
also
 somedays
people
 are bored or need some hours to rest or spend time with relatives or friends.In
this
 situation,
people
 can readily change their worktime. The
second
 reason is that self-employed
people
 are responsible for their income.I mean they can
work
 hard and get lots of money or they can be carefree
people
,as result low money would be earned.
for example
, employees always get the same salaries,unless they can get a promotion from the boss while self-employed
people
 do not have a steady income.They can get higher money day by day.
However
,in terms of being self-employed,
people
 face 
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some drawbacks.As
i
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 mentioned
people
 are totally responsible for income or clerks.If they went bankrupt,lots of damages would appear for these
people
 while if they be a clerk,they can get a salary from insurance.
In addition
,
people
 should manage their
work
 and organization,so they might be too busy and snowed with dozens of paperwork. In conclusion,self-employed
work
 has both advantages and disadvantages.It depends on
people
's abilities
such
 as being good at management and etc.I choose to be self_employed
,
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because
i
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 think that
i
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 can control my organization in the best way.
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