Some people think that the government should establish free libraries in each town. Others believe it is a waste of money since people can access the internet at home to obtain information. Discuss both and give your opinion?

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human
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.
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why some
people
deem that build free
libraries
in each town while
other
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believe since
internet
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the internet
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can be used by
people
at home to get information so
libraries
it is waste of money in my opinion. I believe that
libraries
which is
vital
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part of reading so government provide free
libraries
for human.
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elaborate
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views and lead to a logical conclusion. Commencing with the most prominent reason why the
libraries
are constructed by
government
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in each city for mankind. It is useful to develop reading
skill
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as well as
people
can read myriad books. BY
this
,
people
would
more
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educated and they are getting more data through reading
newspaper
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and books.
For example
, in
UK
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, there
are
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90 per cent of
libraries
are not only free but
also
open for 24/7 weeks
in
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a year.
As a result
, UK citizens are more
also
more educated
people
in the work.
On the other hand
, there are myriad causes why
people
does
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that it is
waste
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a waste
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of money due to
internet
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the internet
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is
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the best way to learn something. The
first
and foremost one is
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internet
which
are
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easy to the reading at home
also
it
help
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to read
book
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the book
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and everything they want to read at everywhere.
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, it is
more
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effective way of reading rather than
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others
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.
For instance
, 95 per cent
people
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like to
reading
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online
such
as e-newspaper, e-books and
article
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articles
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.
This
is why many
people
follow
this
trend. To conclude,
although
internet
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the internet
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provides many things at home,
libraries
are important for
better
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a better
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society because it gives education for human
also
data in a place.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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