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Many students find it difficult to concentrate or pay attention at school.What are the reasons? What could be done to solve this problem?

Recently, concentrating and paying
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 at school has become difficult for many students.There are a number of reasons why
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 is the case ,including but not limited to uninteresting lectures with passive teaching methods.There are various ways by which
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 dilemma can be mitigated,but the best one is having lessons with entertaining
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. Undoubtedly,in schools majority of factors contributing to admissions paying less
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 in school are the prevalence of monotonous, passive teaching methods. When lectures are held for a long period, in one-way style classes without student participation, pupils are less interested and likely to stay mentally.
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.Over time,
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 reduced
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 not only lowers academic performance but
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 decreases learners' interest in learning,
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. The are a lot of solutions to solve
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 issue. One effective way to keep enlistments attentive is by incorporating entertaining and interactive
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 into lessons. Activities,
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 as quizzes, role-plays and small competitions among conscriptions, can break from passive lectures and encourage active participation. When people are engaged in tasks that require solving problems ,movement or creativity, they are less likely to become distracted.
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, several secondary schools showed that classes using short interactive games and
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 which are related to their topic increased students' focus by 40%.
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, learning more dynamic and enjoyable, these
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 not only improve concentration but
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 motivate them to study. In conclusion, engagements pay less
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 because of uninteresting lessons, which can be solved by involving entertaining and interactive
exercises
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.

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task management
Plan your essay: say the reasons first, then give a clear fix. Stick to two or three ideas.
coherence
Link ideas with small words like and, but, then, also. Make the flow easy to follow.
language
Use simple, common words. Check for wrong phrases. Keep grammar clear.
examples
Give one clear example per idea and make facts true. If you use a number, keep it simple.
content
There is a clear topic and plan for fixing focus in class.
structure
The essay uses an intro and a closing part.
organization
Some points are easy to read and link to each other.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • concentration
  • attention span
  • distractions
  • technology
  • boredom
  • tiredness
  • engagement
  • learning disabilities
  • teaching techniques
  • classroom size
  • family issues
  • health problems
  • motivational strategies
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