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Many claim that the fast food industry had a negative effect on the environtment, eating habits, and families. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the
fast
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food
 industry is becoming popular, resulting in negative consequences. I partially agree with
this
 issue, which will be elucidated more below.
To begin
 with, the high consumption of processed cuisine increases proportionately the risk of diseases, not only problems related to the physical body but
also
 mental health because of addictive ingredients.
This
 would presumably encourage the community to frequently eat prepackaged
food
 resulting in several diseases
such
 as stroke due to lack of supply of nutrients and protein needs in children.
Besides
 that, society would be mentally disturbed because they might consider more to consume prepackaged meals based on prioritizing taste over nutrition and impact to the surroundings because of many rubbish plastic packaging wastes from the canned
food
 consumption.
In addition
, convenience nourishment consumption may reduce the togetherness from the family bonds.
This
 is because they prefer eating out for short periods rather than spending time eating with their family.
On the other hand
, eating junk cuisine might save the day rather than cooking at home. It would be more efficient for small families because they can save hours and effort.
For example
, communities who reside alone often eat canned
food
 because they prefer to buy fast
food
 to cook at home due to inconvenience and spend a lot of time and energy eating themselves.
Additionally
, convenience
food
 industry products probably could be the solution for the community when hungry because the foodstuff is easy to find anywhere.
Therefore
, the prepackaged meal could prevent society from getting ulcer disease due to late eating. In conclusion, eating processed nourishment has several benefits for the community because they can save their time to do other activities giving solutions when they are starving.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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