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IThe line chart illustrates and compares the average carbon dioxide emissions per capita in four different countries between 1967 to 2007. Unit is measured in metric tonnes. Overall, it is clear that the average personal CO2 production in Italy and Portugal increased gradually in
this
 given period, while that figure in UK and Sweden had a significant drop. Even though
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 the average personal CO2 production in
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 was the highest in the five decades, yet Portugal remained
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the lowest. In terms of
this
 number for Italy and Portugal, the lines for these two nations shared a similar growing trend. Average personal CO2 emission in Portugal started from roughly 1.3 in 1967, growing up to approximately 5.7 in 2007.
Similarly
, the number of Italy witnessed a rise from above 4 in 1967 to just below 8 in 2007, exceeding that of Sweden in the year around 1990 when its number reached 7. With regard to rest two countries, the amount of average personal emission in
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 went through a linear decline, from 11 in 1967 to merely 9 in 2007.
However
, that amount of Sweden increased moderately from 8.8 to over before 1977, after
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, the figure plummeted to 5.7, which was equal to that of Portugal in 2007.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • role model
  • influence
  • integrity
  • tarnish
  • reputation
  • consequences
  • inappropriate actions
  • morale
  • unity
  • negative environment
  • sponsorship
  • brand image
  • ethical considerations
  • athletic performance
  • respect
  • fairness
  • values
  • behavior
  • impact
  • public attitudes
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