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Some people believe that young generation should follow traditions of their society; others, however, believe that young people should be free to make their own choice as individuals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It's common thought between some
people
 that, nowadays children and teenagers should accept the culture and
tradition
 of their society, while other populations believe that, the new generation should have the freedom to make their
decision
 and
choice
 as an independent person. To pursue my opinion, I totally agree with the
second
 bunch of
people
 who believes, that teens should be free to make their own
decision
 and
choice
 as individuals.
Firstly
, when we are growing up we are gaining knowledge and experience,
therefore
 everyone can make their
decision
 accurately based on their own believes and experiences. We have to demolish the idea, in which, we have to force our custom on youngers.
Actually
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 by forcing our
tradition
 and culture we are taking away an option from teens to build their own experience and invention.
Moreover
, as an adult, we have the right to make our
choice
 as independent
people
.
Secondly
, in
this
 world, we have to search and study to know what is right, and what is wrong. So, there is no need to follow our social
tradition
 and culture. As an
,
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adult if we just follow the existing
tradition
 we can't create new ideas and we will blindly follow other
people
 steps. Living according to our own
choice
 will teach us to take responsibility for whatever we are doing,
hence
, that can help us to increase our self-confidence and trust. That would be
such
 a nice idea to have the freedom to make our life the way we want. To sum up the topic, according to human rights everyone can live the way they want as long as they are not making a problem for others.
Therefore
 everyone can make their
decision
 and
choice
 on their own without any force to follow the previous
tradition
.
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