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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being slef-employed?

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 of getting employed by others. People like to grow their startup's whether its small or big.
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 has both advantages and disadvantages if we look at its all sides. Looking at both sides will lead us to the perfect conclusion.
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 with, there are several of the pros of the self-employed. One of these is to be an expert in the field.
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, the opportunity to discover a
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 of self-potential and widen the knowledge. Since these types of people had a
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 of freedom which can be used wisely to develop as a leader, experts in the broader field.
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, they a
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 of time and money.
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, the owner of the company needs only a return on investment (ROI). They have a
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 as they are only involved in top-level investments.
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, there is another side of the same tale which is it's very stressful sometimes to work as an independent employee.
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, they had to deal with a
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 of unfamiliar situations which in turn brought them stress.
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, in small ,employment they change their patterns to satisfy the customers.
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, top-level management has to make bold decisions in intense pressure positions to sustain their work. Looking at both sides of the topic it is clear that a startup business is quite stressful sometimes depending upon the situation.
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, using the right skillset and making bold decisions
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 situations can be dealt with
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, the individual can get an adrenaline rush by overcoming these situations and can become the experts in their relative fields.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • company
  • organization
  • freedom
  • independence
  • income potential
  • flexibility
  • working hours
  • working location
  • passions
  • interests
  • decision-making
  • business practices
  • disadvantages
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