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“By definition, charity is generosity in offering money, food, and help to the needy. To some people, such kindness should be boundless, others argue for a limit to it.” Which opinion do you support? In about 300 words, present your arguments.

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Charity
 work is defined as generosity in offering food
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and help to the needy. Many believe in offering unlimited kindness,and few others are determined to provide limited
support
. I completely agree with the
second
 thought of limiting the offers and giveaways.
This
 essay examines the reason why I consider limiting
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generous
charity
donations
.
First
 of all, there should be a balance between the amount of
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 we earn and the fair bit of money we grant to charities.Undoubtedly, calculative expenditure saves us from being lost.
For instance
,if we donate more than we could afford,we will potentially end up in
bankrupty
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bankruptcy
.
This
 would obliterate the person himself and his associated family members.
Also
, it is a good idea to ‘think and act’ when it comes to money we earn and lend. Lending is
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remarkable human nature,
however
,it is wise to always think about it twice.
Thus
, our own current and future expenses should be given priority while analysing
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the amount given to
support
 the
people
 in need.
Moreover
,generous
charity
donations
 could be a breeding ground for imbecile individuals.When
people
 know that
support
 is offered, they would not bother to find their own living.Evidently,needy
people
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public
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 platform like trains, stations to collect money.For them,various trains with
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set
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 of
public
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is
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 the
work place
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.If we encourage these
people
 by providing offerings there is no way that these lazy citizens will stretch out or care to find jobs to
support
 their life.So,
charity
donations
 could be highly restricted for real
people
 in need. In conclusion,measurable and calculative
donations
 can be
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act
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 for
a
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risk free
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 living and to
further
 avoid the growth in the number of
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.
Therefore
,it is highly recommended to bound our
support
 for the enrichment of
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 society.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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