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People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There is no doubt that nowadays city-dwellers of metropolises should have some difficulties during their daily routine. Some
people
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 argue that the government must motivate citizens to relocate to smaller
towns
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.
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 consider what kind of
problems
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people
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 can have living in big cities and
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 will agree with the latter statement supporting that by the recent survey. One of the most popular
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 that an average city citizen can meet could be a high level of pollution provoked by the process of industrialisation. Basically, large
towns
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 attract a vast amount of
people
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 that move in so to build their career, enhance their living conditions which require an enlargement of infrastructure, creating more and more new buildings.
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, the ecological situation in
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 places has drastically changed leading to some serious diseases as asthma, bronchitis, heart failure.
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, the high speed of life in the city, bustling atmosphere and high traffic are significant factors that can negatively influence the mental condition of locals. A great example of those
problems
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 was shown by the recent survey from the British Health Academy that revealed the direct correlation between health
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 and life in metropolises where
people
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 asked for medical qualified care twice more often tham villagers.
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, as it was mentioned before,
people
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 tend to relocate for better conditions and amenities in large
towns
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 so without the authority' efforts
people
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 cannot tackle
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 situation. If the government supported families that decided to return to a village area or stay there
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 it would be more beneficial for the country and environment.
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, they can let local
people
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 pay lesser taxes or give them low per cent credits for the development of the village and eventually increase the economy and ecology respectively. In conclusion,
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people
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 living in overpopulated areas face different
problems
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 related to mental and physical health, that problem can be dealt with by the government if they will use financial facilities so to encourage citizens to move to smaller
towns
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban congestion
  • traffic jams
  • lengthy commutes
  • high cost of living
  • financial strain
  • air pollution
  • noise pollution
  • quality of life
  • green space
  • recreational areas
  • social isolation
  • fast-paced lifestyle
  • public services strain
  • overpopulation
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