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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do yoa think this is happening? What can governments do to help redace the amount of rubbish produced? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Currently, people around the
world
 face the
problem
 of pollution because of rubbish quantity.
This
 essay will discuss reasons for
such
 social phenomena and about measures which should be taken to reduce
this
 amount of
trash
.
First
 of all, we should consider the main reason why the quantity of rubbish is increasing on a constant basis. I believe, it is closely connected with enlarging of the human population. I mean that as more individuals we have as many goods fabrics have to produce. In
this
 way, increasing of quantity of humanity is roughly connected with the amount of rubbish which humanity should recycle.
Next
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 but not
last
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least
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 reason is closely connected with
development
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the development
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 of different industries. As more plants we have, as much
trash
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,trash
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 we will have in
final
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.
Last
 but not least there a lot of individuals who do not to take any action in order to solve the
problem
 , because they have become lazy because of progress. The government of each country has to highlight a clear intention to solve
this
 crucial
problem
. I believe that it can have a direct impact on every person in the
world
. So, governments can create more strict laws regarding ecological problems in order to manage to problems of
trash
 and dumps. As I know, there is a decree in the
world
 which was accepted by main countries with a similar sense, but there are difficulties in implementing the Law in a real life.
Nevertheless
, we a have a perfect experience of Scandinavian countries where people have created plants for recycling of goods and getting of energy from the
trash
. To sum up, the
problem
 of
trash
 is existing over the
world
. And Governments can solve
this
problem
 if
intentions
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the intentions
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 and clearness of the aim will be similar to each party involved.
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