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Some people claim that it is immoral to exploit animals, and that the government should prohibit using animals for scientific research. In the meantime, others argue that exploiting animals is crucial for allowing scientists to learn more about human biology and health. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is obvious that more and more people are paying attention to animal experimentation because they think it is immoral to abuse
animals
 and inflict significant agony.
However
, others believe it is the main point to obtain additional scientific understanding. From my point of view, I suppose animal experimentation potentially can discover some way to replace it, but it cannot be fully eliminated. On the one hand, animal experiments can deliver numerous benefits. What should be prioritised is that it can promote the advancement of medical science because
animals
, especially mammals, share many similarities
such
 as body structure and genetic makeup with human beings, which means that the results of experiments on them will
also
 be suitable and crucial for human beings.
Besides
, directly utilising human persons as experimental subjects have been forbidden in many countries due to moral and ethical considerations, leaving animal studies the only alternative speaking of scientific study.
On the other hand
, we have to accept that there have some limitations when it comes to
the
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animal tests.
To begin
 with, the poor lab
animals
, including rabbits, frogs will be injected with different kinds of viruses and even vivisected for the sake of medical observation, which is ruthless and inhuman from any standpoint.
However
, currently, with the rapidly developing pace of high-tech, many studies can be realised by employing technology that will lessen the experiments that be done on
animals
 and
also
 the results and proof may be more acceptable. In all,
the
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animal experiment is not humane and brutal to
animals
, but it is
also
 necessary for the progress of medical research. In the future, due to society's development and people's consciousness, animal experimentation will decline, and
animals
 will be less painful.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exploit
  • immoral
  • prohibit
  • scientific research
  • cruelty
  • human biology
  • ethical considerations
  • medical breakthroughs
  • compromise
  • in vitro methods
  • computer models
  • regulations
  • ethical guidelines
  • minimize suffering
  • life-saving
  • public opinion
  • animal welfare
  • inherently
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