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Environmental hazards are often too great for particular countries or individuals to tackle. We have arrived at a point in time where the only way to lessen environmental problems is at an international level. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Environmental
problems
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 have reached
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 proportions that people feel international organizations must be set up to intervene in
world
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 affairs to resolve these
problems
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. Whether
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 will resolve the problem which is very unlikely as international organizations are just an extension of human behaviour.
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, if human conflicts cannot be resolved at home,
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 they are unlikely to be resolved at the international level.
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, international organizations do attract attention to the growing problem of pollution and the destruction of the environment.
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,
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 I respect the aims of the international community to resolve the issue of environmental pollution and support their cause, I do not believe it is the best or only way to protect the environment; in fact, it is only a small part of what is needed in a global initiative. All
world
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problems
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, whether it is environmental pollution, war, energy insufficiency, or famine, arise from the abusive behaviour of all individuals.
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, the solution to all these
problems
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 is the need for collective consciousness. What is meant by
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 is that each individual must be aware of the impact he or she has on the
world
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 and their unique part to play in
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world
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. After all, if one is happy with his life, he will surely not endeavour to harm the environment or anyone else. His behaviour will be that of a responsible individual. What is needed,
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, is
education
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.
Education
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 is the key to all
problems
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 and it starts from pregnancy all the way to adulthood and beyond.
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,
education
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 means that children all over the
world
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 should be allowed to go to schools with good teachers and where teaching materials and methods can be adapted to each individual.
Education
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 means raising children to be responsible individuals.
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 may sound like
utopia
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, but it is not: if a country has important
problems
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 in its educational system,
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 it should realize that it is contributing to the
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's
problems
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. These are perhaps long term solutions, but they are more realistic solutions than setting up yet another international organization.
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