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Deforestation caused by human activity is happening in many parts of the world, with serious results for the environment. What do you think can be done to solve this problem? Support your opinion with reasons and examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Nowadays, a
lot
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 of situations impact world environmental problems. Particularly
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deforestation
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 problem has to tackle with each country and has to prevent increasing desertification. In
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 essay, I will explain what I consider to be the main cause and suggest ways to prevent
deforestation
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 in the future. Generally, the
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 role is to provide purifying water and
air
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 and residence of
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 or vegetation.
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, living a
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 of
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 and flora in the
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that is
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 supported their basic food and habitat. ,
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 trees provide a natural defence against
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 pollution.
Deforestation
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 is caused by a variety of a
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 of reasons.
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, the logging industry supplies the raw materials for an array of products, building a residential as resources, making
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. We consume plenty amount of
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 in daily life.
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, in my ,opinion we can suggest some possible solutions to
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 problem.Generally, the
forest
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 role is to provide purifying water and
air
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 and residence of
animals
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 or vegetation.
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, living a
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 of
animals
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 and flora in the
forest
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that is
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 supported their basic food and habitat. ,
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However
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 trees provide a natural defence against
air
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 pollution.
Deforestation
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 is caused by a variety of a
lot
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 of reasons.
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, the logging industry supplies the raw materials for an array of products, building a residential as resources, making
paper
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. We consume plenty amount of
paper
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 in daily life.
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, in my ,opinion we can suggest some possible solutions to
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 problem.
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, we could after use, the
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 will be recycled again.
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, the government should regulate a law about the limit of extent deforest.
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, it will be over deforested by illegal
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. In conclusion (To conclude), if we can prevent the cutting down of trees for commercial purposes, we could save a healthy
forest
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 ecosystem.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deforestation
  • sustainable living
  • ecosystem balance
  • legislation
  • enforcement
  • illegal logging
  • land clearing
  • afforestation
  • reforestation
  • agroforestry
  • conservation efforts
  • economic incentives
  • technological innovations
  • forest management
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