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Deforestation caused by human activity is happening in many parts of the world, with serious results for the environment. What do you think can be done to solve this problem? Support your opinion with reasons and examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Nowadays, a
lot
 of situations impact world environmental problems. Particularly
,
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deforestation
.
This
 problem has to tackle with each country and has to prevent increasing desertification. In
this
 essay, I will explain what I consider to be the main cause and suggest ways to prevent
deforestation
 in the future. Generally, the
forest
 role is to provide purifying water and
air
 and residence of
animals
 or vegetation.
On the other hand
, living a
lot
 of
animals
 and flora in the
forest
that is
 supported their basic food and habitat. ,
However
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 trees provide a natural defence against
air
 pollution.
Deforestation
 is caused by a variety of a
lot
 of reasons.
For instance
, the logging industry supplies the raw materials for an array of products, building a residential as resources, making
paper
. We consume plenty amount of
paper
 in daily life.
However
, in my ,opinion we can suggest some possible solutions to
this
 problem.Generally, the
forest
 role is to provide purifying water and
air
 and residence of
animals
 or vegetation.
On the other hand
, living a
lot
 of
animals
 and flora in the
forest
that is
 supported their basic food and habitat. ,
However
Add a comma
,However
show examples
 trees provide a natural defence against
air
 pollution.
Deforestation
 is caused by a variety of a
lot
 of reasons.
For instance
, the logging industry supplies the raw materials for an array of products, building a residential as resources, making
paper
. We consume plenty amount of
paper
 in daily life.
However
, in my ,opinion we can suggest some possible solutions to
this
 problem.
Firstly
, we could after use, the
paper
 will be recycled again.
Secondly
, the government should regulate a law about the limit of extent deforest.
Otherwise
, it will be over deforested by illegal
deforestation
. In conclusion (To conclude), if we can prevent the cutting down of trees for commercial purposes, we could save a healthy
forest
 ecosystem.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deforestation
  • sustainable living
  • ecosystem balance
  • legislation
  • enforcement
  • illegal logging
  • land clearing
  • afforestation
  • reforestation
  • agroforestry
  • conservation efforts
  • economic incentives
  • technological innovations
  • forest management
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