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Some people think it is more important to plant trees in open areas of towns and cities than to build more housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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The importance of planting
trees
 in the world
because
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trees
 are very helpful to create fresh
air
. So some people deem that
trees
 must be planted in open space of town by people compared to building more home. I accord entirely with the nations and
this
 essay will
further
 elaborate on the plantation of
trees
 in
cities
. Commencing with the most prominent reason why
trees
 are a pivotal part of like as well as it must be planted in place of
cities
 because it helps to decrease the
temperature
 of surrounding areas. By
this
, we have seen the
temperature
 rates in towns generally is high.
As a result
, we should plant
trees
 where some areas of
cities
 because it reduces the
temperature
 of the environment.
For example
, in India, there are many
cities
 as well as the government faced
temperature
problem
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 of
cities
 so the government would take the mission of plantation in
such
cities
 like Delhi. Another worth considering the reason
of
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 my agreement is affixed with the improved
air
qulity
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quality
 index, which does not only matter for human life but
also
it
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is effective on animals as well as
food
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the food
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 cycle. By
this
,
trees
 help improve the
air
 quality index by producing O2 in the
air
.
Therefore
, mankind has seen that in
such
 places where
trees
 are more there
air
 quality index is below
the
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100,
it
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 is
the
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 good number
among
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this
 pollution. To conclude, even though the housing needs of humans, I think we can not survive without
trees
 for
better
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a better
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 environment of the world and better health.
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