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Technology is being used more and more in education. Discuss advantages and disadvantages

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It is argued that technology is playing a vast role in schools and universities. It is helping the students to obtain
information
 in an effective way. As well as there is a lack of face to face to contact considered as a disadvantage.
Further
 discussion about the benefit, access to vast data helps student’s life easier. As far as my concern,
this
 is the main advantage of using the
internet
. The
information
 seeker can gather any related topic with the support of the
internet
. It is not limited for students to have depth knowledge through the
internet
.
For example
, compare the situation of writing an assignment before the technology arises and after. It was time-consuming to find a piece of
information
. It is a significant advantage to use the
internet
 for education. Anyhow pupils argue that lack of face-to-face contact is one of the drawbacks.
Further
, they say dependency on machinery may lead students to face difficulties using the material and other sources of
information
. It
also
 discussed lack of interaction with human possibility leads to a lower level of emotional intelligence.
For instance
, parents’ feedback of using smartphones and computers for online schooling negative impact on student soft skills. In conclusion, to enjoy the benefit of technology, it has to be balanced equally. To overcome the drawbacks, education institutes should have a strategy for gathering material with or without the
internet
.
Also
 promoting human interaction is so important during the online study. It must be a compulsory event that all to participate
.
Change preposition
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Such
 as team building, gathering, and any event
that is
 useful for emotional intelligence.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-learning
  • digital literacy
  • multimedia resources
  • online collaboration
  • virtual classrooms
  • MOOCs (Massive Open Online Courses)
  • learning management systems
  • adaptive learning
  • screen time
  • tech-savvy
  • cyberbullying
  • digital equity
  • edtech (educational technology)
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