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Some think increasing business and cultural contact between nations is positive. Others think it leads to the disappearance of the national identity. Discuss both views and state your own opinion

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Nowadays, it has become an issue that to make business connections with native countries is a positive or negative impact, whereas, many
people
offenend
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offered
offend
 that change, but some masses welcomed it from their heart. Personally, I feel it is a great step towards the progress of the
country
.
Firstly
, the business between the nations
make
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 new possible ways to boost the economy where
public
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 get good employment opportunities with satisfactory income. It not only supports countries
economy
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economies
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 but
also
 improves the infrastructure.
For example
,
india
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India
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 is a developing
country
 so, it needs aids from other nations .
Therefore
, India welcomes other nations to invest their money in their
country
 like to give land for
setup
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 their head office and make plants for increasing the production.
However
, the biggest fear is that it affects the
culture
 of the
country
, crowed easily influence towards the western
culture
,
therefore
, the extension of their own
culture
 is becoming
biggest
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 issue in some countries. Like, in my own state
punjab
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Punjab
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 which is known for
his
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its
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culture
 and values, but now
people
 forget it. According to
recent
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 survey,
people
 don't know
main
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 festivals and their history which is very shameful for their youngsters. If
people
 leave behind their roots they
don't survive no
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don't survive any
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 long so
people
 keep that thing in their mind. In conclusion,
although
people
 oppose that change to save their
culture
 and values, it can't be neglected for well fair for the
country
 so ,
people
 need to be
patience
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 to accept
this
 change.
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