Nowadays, there is a trend that the media focuses on problems and emergencies rather than positive developments. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. To what extent do you agree?

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Media plays a significant role in communicating incidents occurring around the world; In recent days it has been argued that it focuses more on negative information rather than positive one. Some claim that

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a phenomenon is harmful to individuals and society.

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point to some extent, it spreads consciousness among the public by reporting the proactive measures of these happenings. Primarily, many channels focus more on negative incidents like accidents, crimes and anti-social elements.

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, it creates inner fear in society which eventually spreads more negativity in the surroundings.

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, it is easy to attract

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with negative news rather than positive one

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, some news channels use

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detrimental information to accelerate their TRP ratings.

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, there are so many reality shows that focus on personal family issues, which would be discussed in the public forum with a panellist compromising the involved individuals.

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turns out to be more negative as these channels will create more fights among the

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in order to increase their viewers. Unequivocally, News reporting can not always be positive. Perhaps, some negative information will create alertness in the community. Take cyber-crimes

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, there are fake websites which would send links to our personal mobiles and hack our accounts. Only if these websites are reported in the media, the public will have the awareness not to click on any of the links.

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incidents reported publicly will create fear among the hackers which prevents them from

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carrying it.

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, Even though some problems carry a great awareness message to

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, it is

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the media person's duty to spread positive developments happening around the world in order to spread positivity and belief among

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vyshu.bakkiamMon Oct 02 2023

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Make sure to address all parts of the task in detail. Consider discussing not just the harms and benefits of media focusing on problems but also potential solutions to maintain a balance.

coherence cohesion

Consider using more varied language structures to introduce points, such as 'On the one hand', 'Moreover', or 'Conversely'. This will help improve the logical structuring of your essay.

task achievement

Try to include specific examples that are well-developed and clearly relate to your main points. This would make your argument more persuasive and easier to follow.

introduction conclusion present

Your essay clearly introduces the topic and presents both sides of the argument.

logical structure

You have a logical progression of ideas, moving smoothly from one paragraph to the next while maintaining the focus on the main issue.

supported main points

The essay covers relevant aspects of the topic, highlighting both the negative impact of media focusing on problems and the potential benefits.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

291 words

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