Modern children are suffering from the diseases that were once considered to be meant for adults only. Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children. What are its causes and what solutions can be offered? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge experience.
Nowadays, young people are suffering from any kind of sickness that mostly applied to
olders
only. It Correct your spelling
orders
holders
also
happened with obesity which widely
common amongst children currently. There are several reasons is Add a missing verb
is widely
effected
Correct your spelling
affected
this
issue that will discuss in this
essay followed by examples, as well as possible solutions to be taken.
To begin
with, sedentary
lifestyle is now becoming a behaviour of youngsters. Add an article
a sedentary
For example
, they rather stay inside the house and stick on
their gadget or play video games than go to outside Change preposition
to
activities
. Without a
proper and enough exercise grow overweight is unavoidable. Correct article usage
apply
Moreover
, while they just sitting or lying inside playing games or stuff, it is more likely they also
provide snacks, soda or fastfood
to consume so that they Correct your spelling
fast food
not
get bored fastly. In conclusion, unhealthy dietary Add a missing verb
do not
habit
and Fix the agreement mistake
habits
sedentary
lifestyle,Correct article usage
a sedentary
are play
Change the verb form
play
major
part in causing obesity Add an article
a major
to
Change preposition
in
yougsters
.
Possible solutions to overcome Correct your spelling
youngsters
this problems
Change the determiner
this problem
these problems
are have
to deal with some part of Change the verb form
have
society
elements Replace the word
social
such
as parents
or guardians in home
and educators. Add a hyphen
in-home
For instance
,parents
play main
role in Change the article
the main
house
to ensure their kids Correct article usage
the house
consuming
healthy food and take Wrong verb form
consume
a
sufficient time to exercise or join outside Correct article usage
apply
activities
. They can invite their child for camping, fishing or so on. Furthermore
, teacher
and Fix the agreement mistake
teachers
school
should conduct many more Fix the agreement mistake
schools
sports
game
which involved students inter-class so that they may practice for the game and spend more time Fix the agreement mistake
games
outsied
. Providing and supporting Correct your spelling
outside
extracuriculer
in all Correct your spelling
extracurricular
kind
of Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
sports
is also
essential. Sometimes teenagers have interest
in Correct article usage
an interest
sports
but there are limited facilities for them to use, so they just choose another easier way to spend time such
as playing video games.
To sum up, sedentary lifestyle and dietary habit
are the main causes of obesity for teens. Fix the agreement mistake
habits
Parents
and school
play Fix the agreement mistake
schools
essential
role to overcome Correct article usage
an essential
this
issue by balancing their inside activities
with some physical activities
like sports
or camping. Parents
or guardians is
Change the verb form
are
also
responsible to ensure what kind of food they consume and balancing them with nutritious
meal.Add an article
a nutritious
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