Young drivers are careless and overconfident and too many are killed in accidents . To eliminate this problem we could teach children the skills of driving while they are also at school to what extent do you agree and disagree

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Nowadays,
accidents
are increasing day by day due to reckless and brash youngsters.it leads to major
accidents
and killed so many innocent lives. I completely agree with
this
view
that is
awareness regarding driving
rules
should be provided in school is helpful to prevent
accidents
and save their lives. To start with,
accidents
occur due to irresponsible teenagers.To
eloborate
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elaborate
it,
teengers
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teenagers
want
chill
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and thrill while driving so that they
donot
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do not
don't
care about
rules
and
ragulations
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regulations
of driving.
For example
, they drink
alcohal
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alcohol
during driving .They cannot control
by
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themselves so that they cannot drive
vehicle
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vehicles
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with
attention
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the attention
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that
cause
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causes
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an accident
the accident
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accident
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accidents
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.As a
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results
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they get injured or
loss
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of life .
Thus
,
government
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the government
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should make strict
rules
and regulations of driving and punishment against
them
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those
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who breaks the rule.
Further
moving,to control the
accidents
children should teach in their schools.To explain it, awareness of driving subject should be compulsory in their school so that they can learn easily.
Moreover
, teachers should make them understand about laws and skills of driving .
For instance
,heavy
fine
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give to those who
donot
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do not
don't
follow the
rules
like overspeeding or
drink
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drinking
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alcohal
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alcohol
during operating the vehicle.
Consequently
,
teching
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teaching
them
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at in
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in
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an
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early age is beneficial for them or society.It can
be saves
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save
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life
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the life
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of people . In conclusion,
although
government
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the government
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made laws for driving yet, teachers and authorities should teach them in
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the institution
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institution
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institutions
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as
compulsore
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compulsory
compulsive
subject
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subjects
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then
they can be aware and serious
regarding
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about
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driving.In the end ,
then
,it can
be control
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control
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the mishaps
occurs
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that occurs
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in the world.
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